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Blog Title:	Global Passion - Dinner Date

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solorunner	12-Oct-15 3:17:19 Cowboy, I tried to give this a read, but I'm afraid I had to stop almost immediately. As a professional writer, I respect anyone with the ambition and fortitude to put pen to paper; it's tougher than most people realize, so I applaud you. That said, you would do well to learn more about the craft of writing before setting out on a full-length novel because, to be blunt, you don't have the tools yet. There are some basic concepts you need to more familiar with, such as picking and staying with a tense (past or present) and proper paragraphing (e.g., start a new paragraph in dialogue whenever the speaker changes). You might also want to rethink your word choices, particularly where adverbs are concerned, and even more particularly where they're modifying attribution; in almost every case, elminating the adverb and strengthening the verb is the way to go (e.g., "she blurted" instead of "she said excitedly"). As a tutorial, I'd suggest Stephen King's book On Writing, which is part memoir, part instruction manual. You needn't be a horror writer, or even a fan, to learn from it. But even better teachers are your own favorite stories and novels. After you read them for enjoyment, go over them again line by line to see what makes them so engrossing. Ask yourself why the author made particular choices in the plot, pacing and diction (word choice), and whether you would have structured something differently in that instance. I say all this not to discourage you but rather to spur you to improve. You might have a great story to tell, but if no one can penetrate the grammar, no one will read your work, much less get enjoyment out of it...and that's kind of the point, isn't it? And I would further challenge you to rework this excerpt with everything I've said in mind and post it again; if you do, I'd appreciate the chance to read it.

funlvncwby	12-Oct-15 6:17:51 Thank you solo for your words of advice. The paragraph structure is correct in MS Word, and the copy/paste to the website smashed everything together. My college professor encouraged me to write more. She enjoyed my writing while in her class. I will take your suggestions and revise my posting. My novel is mostly in outline format. It is by no means complete. I am still working on several other characters and complete bios.